作者veryawesome (12指腸)
看板Eng-Class
標題[文法] 英文作文
時間Mon Apr 12 20:47:58 2010
A Precious Picture
Eighteen years ago, I was born in a hospital. My mom told me that I
always slept when she was holding me and I looked just like a doll. So she
took many pictures of me. One of pictures showed her holding me. It was
taken by my dad with my brother standing behind the bed in the hospital.
In the picture, my mom looked at me because I was sleeping again, and she
thought I was cute. My brother was looking at something which look like he
didn't know my dad was taking a picture. I love this picture so much so that it
has always been on my desk since I found it. It moves me because a new life
came by my family and brought happiness to them. Important of all, the baby
was me.
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