[求譯] 創造歷史 請大家幫我翻 謝謝

[shoop (我要專心)]

求英譯：


句子：XX活動是我們公司第一次嘗試,已為我們公司寫下歷史的新頁。


我的試譯：XX is the first try for our company. It has made a history of 公司名.


提問： 感覺好像很中式英文.但我曾聽老外總經理鼓勵大家時說叫大家為自己創造歷史時
       說到"make a history of yourself."
       那時還特別記起來.但不確定是否真的可以這樣用.
       還是of要改成for呢?
       請各位前輩指導
       謝謝



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