Re: [請益] 請問我這樣打有錯誤嗎?

[hoch (Sanctuary)]

: I feel I am lucky because I have a warm family.


I am a lucky man because I grew up in a warm family. <必須加上解釋，
為何這樣子就很幸運......>


: I am active and optimistic,I also really enjoy in my work.

I always feel optimistic about my work. Besides, I have strong
self-motivation so I enjoy my work very much.


: So after I graduated from high school,I began to looking for job and doing.

I started to look for jobs immediately after obtaining my high school
diploma.

: In the past year,I have done some job ,such as telemarketing to sale the
:  Internet...

I have taken many different types of positions, such as a tele-marketing
sales representative and <其他你做過的......>

: These job made me cultivate my patience,and I feel I am grow up in doing
:  these job.

其實我不太懂 patience 在這裡的意義。因為工作過，所以變很有耐心？個人
覺得這裡的邏輯關係不是很清楚。

Such a diverse experience allows me to easily adapt to various types
of works.


: Hope I have a chance to access to company,thank you.

I am very confident that my expertise and backgound would make positive
contributions to your corporation. I am looking forward to hearing from you
soon.

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