Re: [求譯] 練習翻譯，請版友提供修改建議

[tengharold (RoadMan_A)]

※ 引述《wadewang (小龜)》之銘言：
: 屬句子／段落：（三行以上皆屬段落）
: 中文部分：
: 廣東精打細算的家庭主婦在賣蒜的攤位前抱怨，蒜頭比豬肉還貴，每斤都漲到人民幣9元
: 以上，「我決定不吃了」。當地媒體在菜攤上甚至看到1斤13元的大蒜，價格已漲到10年
: 來新高。
: 多位批發商向南方都市報表示，今年大蒜漲價主要原因是產量低、種植成本上漲。其次，
: 今年大蒜出口比往年多，國內的銷量減少。運輸等成本的增加也是大蒜漲價的原因，尤其
: 種植成本的增加更是主因。
: 據了解，中國大蒜產地以山東、江蘇為主，當地經濟成長，農藥和肥料的成本也在漲，加
: 上北方的天災，導致蒜價漲了不少。
: 廣東省價格監測中心分析表示，儘管目前是新蒜大量上市時節，蒜價卻如坐雲霄飛車連創
: 新高。一些菜市場和超市發現，蒜頭零售價多在1斤9到13元之間。
: 我的試譯：（求譯「段落」者，本欄請勿留白）
: Homemakers with careful calculation and strict budgeting complained the high
  homemaker...budgeting 這段翻得太硬                       complained ABOUT
: price of garlic in front of street vendors. The price of it was over 9 NCY a
                                           用garlic比較明確^^            RMB
: catty, which is more expensive than pork. 「I give up!!」 In the market the
         ^^^^^^^^可省略                      "I'm not buying this!" She said.
: local media even found that the price was over 13 NCY a catty which hit new
local reporters          garlic at 13 RMB per catty, a price not seen in 10
years.
: high in a decade.
: The main cause of garlic price rise this year was output decline and
                    this price hike was...
: cultivation cost rise, many wholesalers told 南方都市報. In the next place,
                   increases,                The Nandu Daily. 其次=furthermore,
: the increasing exports and decreasing domestic sales volume of garlic
: compared to former years were also the reasons of garlic price rise. In
  ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^可省略                 for this price hike.
: addition to cultivation cost rise, the main reason of raising price of
                               increases (the main reason for the price hike),
: garlic, transport cost rise also had influence on garlic price.
          rising transport costs also pushed up garlic prices.
: It was understood that the main producing area was山東and江蘇. Economic
Shandong and Jiangsu are understood to be the major garlic producing areas.
: growth, cost rise of insecticide and fertilizer of these places and the
Economic growth drove up the costs of insecticide... in these areas, and
: natural disaster in northern China led to garlic price rise.
natural disasters in...              ... all further contributed to this hike.

以上都是磚頭~

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But the airways are clean and there's nobody singing to me now
        -Bittersweet Symphony, The Verve

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推 wadewang:好多磚頭...T_T 非常感謝你的修改....
→ tengharold:繼續加油~想當年我大一寫哲學報告，直接被教授退件
→ tengharold:然後再加一句"過來找我"，因為我文法+文字邏輯太差
→ tengharold:也是一直寫一直被改，但寫越久被改越少...
→ tengharold:十多年後換我改別人 XD 所以繼續寫，會進步的
推 ajia0818:十多年￣▽￣"
→ tengharold:你從開始會講話以來，學中文的時間不只十幾年了吧 XD