作者priv (邪惡松鼠)
看板Eng-Class
標題Re: [請益] 請幫我看一下作文
時間Tue Sep 14 16:32:33 2010
※ 引述《endlesssad (無盡傷悲)》之銘言:
: Tips for A Better Sleep
: It is important to have a wonderful beginning in the morning. Therefore,
: we should take a good sleep the night before so tha we can get up early.
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^ that
這邊很拗口的感覺,前一晚應該不用強調吧...
we should take a good night's sleep so that we can get up early.
(應該這樣比較順? 雖然我覺得邏輯還是怪怪的)
: How to sleep well all night? First, don't take whatever bothers us in
: daytime with us into sleep. Relaxing can help everyone to have a good dream.
: Second, if it is hard to fall asleep, drinking a glass if milk is a useful way
of
A suggestion: Do spell check in Word.
: according to doctor's advice. Furtheremore, music can also let us calm down.
^^^^^^^^^^^^ ^^^ help is better
Futhermore
: Before sleeping, remember to choose a beautiful song which you like. Besides,
這邊上下句太牽強,建議再潤一下
: it is said that we had better not to watch horrible programs in the evening.
^^^^^^^^ horror
horrible programs是很爛的節目
: It is easy to get a nightmare. Above of all, if those methods can't solve
: our sleeping problems, we should ask for help by a doctor instead of taking
^^ by是錯的
try "ask a doctor for advice"
: medicicne by ourselves. Having a bad sleep will ruin or health. Everyone
^^^^^^^^^ again...
: should take it seriously to change the bad sleep.
: Ignoring tiny infection may cause incredible outcome such as the famous
: theory "Butterfly Effect." We should take it seriously as having a good sleep
蝴蝶效應好像不是這個意思 ^^ 怪怪的
: because we obtain the energy we need for a day from that.
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