[請益] 可以幫我看一段簡單的自我介紹嗎??

[WalkX (紅燒肥貓咪)]

因為明天要面試一間公司，對方需要準備中英文自我介紹

因為我以前工作都在沒有使用英文的環境(連寫都用不到)

所以絞盡腦汁趕了一篇，因為是口語化的自我介紹

所以想請各位高手幫我看看有沒有用錯或不通順的地方

因為是中英文介紹，所以不足的地方我可以用中文補齊

感謝各位！面試時間是下午兩點^^

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Good afternoon!

I want to thank you for giving me this opptunity to be here.

Now, I will introduce myself.

My name is XXX. I'm 29 year's old.

The avantage of me is hardworking, responsibility, honesty,

fast-learning and creativity.


My lack in this position is that my English skills is currently

not enough to communicate with foreigners well, but I believe I

can learn this ability in the short time in English environment.


After discharging from military services, I worked in three diffirent

properties of companies.


With these experience, I learned a lot, like good attitudes and

soft power.


Moreover, with the sales experiences of the last job, I'm interested

in sales job.


According to my experiences and characters, I believe I'm qualified

to do the job, and I feel I can make some positive contributions to

your company in the future.


That's all. Thanks for your precious time.


<對方用英文問第一個問題>

Excuse me! May I talk with you in Chinese.

It's a good idea to express my views in depth and smooth. Thanks.

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感謝各位了





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