[文法] 真的很爛的文法需要指正謝謝

[Freakbear (北兒)]

小弟現在在上某地方的英文寫作課

老師給了我們三個短句叫我們練習  sentence building

因為我文法超爛，也沒有甚麼構句的概念

之前準備多益也只有練習聽跟讀（七百出頭），用說跟寫就會卡住了，很卡。

而且感覺文法超錯誤連篇

三個短句我花了一個半小時寫了又刪刪了又改，越加越長感覺變成小短文了

在這鼓起勇氣po給各位老師看，希望能給我意見教我如何改進，謝謝

1. The man is an employee.

我：The young man who wears a stereotypical glasses and colorful tie,
called Ryan,is an employee who join this company recently,full of
enthusiasm,wants to do a great thing to earn approval and compliment from
his colleagues and boss.

2.The managers are having a meeting.

我：The managers comes from different departments,such as Human Resourses
Department,Adiministration Department,Marketing Department,etc,are having
a extremely important annual meeting in the conference room at 6 floor.

3.Apple is a company.

我：Apple is a full of fashion and creativity company,which manufactured
lots of fun,functional and efficient products.Such as Macbook,i Pod Touch,
i Phone,etc.Some people even tattoo the "Apple logo"on their body.Apple
always make waves impact the world when they release new products.

我知道亂七八糟，從今以後我會好好學習文法的，謝謝各位老師的指教 >.<"

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推 daishai:考七百初頭還算爛嗎@@ 因該已經打倒一票人了吧...
→ Freakbear:只要使用好解題技巧，ex:聽力聽關鍵字，其實就很容易
→ Freakbear:拿這樣的分數，跟實力沒太大關係，這是我吃了誠實豆沙包
→ Freakbear:後的肺腑之言@@
推 noruas:1. Watching the man is an employee's job.