推 hsuwen:感謝指導！ 06/07 23:57
我覺得重點都沒有講到,
第一段life is more than working...你是要說生活比工作重要嗎??
就算你真的這麼覺得, 那也不要讓你的老闆知道...
我覺得第一段都是多餘的, 沒有人會想知道這些事情
第二段應該多講一些學業上的東西, 更具體的東西,
有那麼多的EE科系, 你們學校的EE專常在哪裡,
那你又學到了啥麼,
第三段還要多講一些實際上的工作內容, 聽你講完, 我也不知道
你的工作到底是啥麼
最後, 是有規定要寫英文自傳嗎?? 你這種英文肯定是扣分的...
※ 引述《hsuwen (我是個胖子~)》之銘言：
: 各位好,希望能幫我改通順及簡單扼要,謝謝大家了!!!
: First,thank you for giving me the chance for the interview.
: I'd like to divide introduction myself into 3 parts of brief introduction
: myself,eduction background,work experiences.
: Starting from first section,my name is ABC,
: I was born and raised a loving family with my parents and a younger brother.
: I think life is more than working so in my free time,I like to go hiking,
: travel,exercising and social activities.By these hobbies I can refuel
: my energy and replenish my stamina to let me try to do my best on all
: tough things.
: Then about education background,I graduated from ABC University in 2009
: with a bachelor degree in Electrical Engineering.I have learned many things
: In four years of my university such as how to be a good leader as being
: a class monitor at school,how to be a good team worker at student clubs,
: and how to solve many difficult problems about creating
: interpersonal relationship,adapting environment and graduating on time
: by myself in my transfer student life that is the most influenced me
: deeply.Let me be more sociable,more independent and more positive !
: After eduction background, I'd like to talk about working experiences.
: The most impressed of part-time jobs is transport workers in cake factory
: and promotional staff in the hypermarket.When I need to spend my more
: strength,that will be more stronger to me. When I keep a friendly attitude
: that made myself approachable to customers for promotion,that can train my
: communication skil.I also learned how to do my best and be responsible for
: own work.Whether the experiences in studying or working that taught
: me how to communicate with people, how to respond to the problems and
: how to solve them. I really enjoy these kinds of jobs.
: Please give me a chance. Thank you so much!!
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※ 編輯: popopopopo 來自: 220.135.132.243 (06/07 20:26)