[求譯] 請幫我看英文履歷

[balajaing (微笑，深呼吸)]

我想請大家幫我看一下我自己所打英文履歷，主要針對Cover letter那部份

內文很長，先謝謝大家有耐心的看完

主要想看用字跟文法上有無錯誤之問題

謝謝大家～

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Having heard from administration of school I graduated that you are expecting

to make some additions to your company in October. At the time about

September, I direct and rough sent my resume by mail, it was so ashamed that

I should be more precise to handle this, such as English CV. But I just want

to get this chance tightly result in ignoring some important detail. So I

deeply appreciated when receiving your response.


I had been graduated from school for two months. In the period, I often think

if I won't go toward to engineering region developed, what I can do.

Actually, I still no idea yet. Fortunate, I know which kind of person I want

to be, which kind of life I want. I know I want to get it! Because of those

reason so I am here. From the official website, I found the people always

seek a way to solve variety problems. I trust they will make me experience

here rewarding, valuable, and fun.


In study period, through the operation of the experiment proved the theory

and the practice were complements each of the other. Besides, comparison

theory and practice trained ability of thinking logically. Further on tried

to seek the reason from the failure and bring out more ideas. Experimental

experience and attitudes gradually developed, and then the skills of emerging

and solving problems were chastened in the still. Moreover, I had engaged in

the “XIN-GUANG plan” and interacted with students from different

department. The plan fostered my willpower and courage to rough the

difficulties and through the other activities, I learned the spirit of

teamwork, the skills of effectively communication and cooperation with other

people.


I constantly encourage myself to be the person who has independent spirit,

open-mindedness and positive attitude. I’d like to contribute myself to the

future job and anticipate myself to do the job efficient and excellent. I’ll

do my best and keep improving myself.


I would be very happy to work under the surrounding if it is possible. Thank

you in advance for your consideration and courtesy

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謝謝

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※ 編輯: balajaing       來自: 114.40.9.166         (10/09 09:58)
推 Bigfatty73:廢話蠻多的, 要修剪一下
→ Bigfatty73:第一段我建議全刪
→ Bigfatty73:不要講你什麼都不會 規劃空白 要幹嘛不知道
→ Bigfatty73:講你經歷什麼對工作職位有用, 什麼能力公司用得上你
→ Bigfatty73:為什麼你決定選他們, 跟他們之後有什麼打算
→ Bigfatty73:有什麼期望或是對公司有什麼要求
→ Bigfatty73:cover letter要精要不要聊天
→ dunchee:這不是"Cover letter"的格式，也遠超出範圍 建議你買本寫
→ dunchee:英文履歷(含cover letter)的書，幾百塊(台幣)的投資，和你
→ dunchee:日後收入比起來很划算的
→ balajaing:嗯，第一段我有打算直接放在mail上，給跟我聯絡面試的人
→ balajaing:想要謝謝她之類的，大概就只有第一句那附近左右會放在
→ balajaing:cover letter上。應該說，是我表達的不夠好，在第三段那
→ balajaing:我說明的我求學中所獲得的東西，以及在下一段中的個性、
→ balajaing:態度。我會試著以更好的方式去表達出重點。
→ balajaing:我在猜你說的格式是指在一開始那邊的姓名、住址、公司名
→ balajaing:稱、稱謂那些東西嗎？還是各段表達的重點？其實我有點模
→ balajaing:糊。不過我會去買書，我相信他們有一定的用處。
→ balajaing:真的謝謝你們