[請益] 字的深淺

[kkben (多想一步)]

He started his moves, slowly and continually this time.  He lay upon me with
his arms他用雙手撐著  趴在我身上; I can FEEL his weights on me.  At first,
he moved slowly, with leisure SINKING in and SLIPPING out of my body.  As I got
used this foreign feelings, I WAS RAISING MY hips tentatively TO MEET HIS
THRUST with his moves.

以上為試做

1.
只是  發現
能用/會用  字有限

2. with his arms 這樣有寫出撐著  這個畫面??


3.滑進身體  還有更精確的字?

4. 迎合  somebody, bring me AN inspiration, please

多謝指教




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推 hotfuzzmilli:迎合:meeting his thrusts. As in:...raising one's
→ hotfuzzmilli:hips to meet one's thrusts... there you go
→ hotfuzzmilli:try "sink in" instead of "slip in"
→ hotfuzzmilli:but of course you have your own image in mind:)
→ hotfuzzmilli:oh, and don't say "sense his weights on me"
→ hotfuzzmilli:"feel" is more direct, and "weights" are 啞鈴
→ kkben:THANKS
※ 編輯: kkben           來自: 111.249.146.172      (01/29 16:08)
推 hotfuzzmilli:你想要表達的"趴"是指下半身貼合、上半身撐起來嗎?
※ 編輯: kkben           來自: 111.249.146.172      (01/29 19:03)
推 hotfuzzmilli:呃應該是meet HIS thrust才對
※ 編輯: kkben           來自: 118.167.148.63       (01/29 23:18)