Re: [文法] 一小段對話被說文法錯很多orz

[BenSmithVII (T)]

※ 引述《diddy (掛網中請勿拍打餵食)》之銘言：
: 雖然我很久沒碰英文了
: 但感覺都是很簡單的文法
: 不知道所謂的錯很多錯在哪 ˊ口ˋ
: 為了表示誠意...如果幫忙找出一個錯誤  奉上微薄的50P  謝謝 >"<
: Choco: This birthday cake looks so good, I think I should give it a try.
                                   建議改 am going to^^^^^^
: Lee: Oh, it's very delicious. The roast chicken is delicious.
                                                              ^, too
:      Maybe you can try some!
                 ^^^建議改成 should
: Choco: Sure! Thank you! I'll try some. By the way, my name is Choco.
:        Nice to meet you.
                         ^! 要興奮一點!
: Lee: I'm Lee. Nice to meet you, too.
                                     ^! 同上
:      I'm a chef work in the restaurant next street.
                  ^^^^ working
:      You look so young...What do you do? Are you still student?
                                                        ^ a
: Choco: Yes, I'm studying in Japanese now.
                           ^^刪        ^^^建議刪
:        The star and I are classmates of collage. How about you?
              ^^            ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^college classmates 比較順
              ^^直接講壽星的名字,我暫時想不起來英文有沒有壽星的對應詞. Orz
: Lee: Oh, I'm his elder brother. Hey, your basketball shoes are very cool!
                   ^^^^^older                  習慣上用  look^^^
:      Are you interesting in basketball?
                       ^^^ed
: Choco: Yes! I like Michael Jordan the most. And you? What's your hobby?
         你上句是問你對籃球有興趣嗎? 所以你這邊說我愛MJ不太順...
: Lee: I enjoy cooking. All my friend love what I cook.
                                    ^s
:      My dream is to be a great cook.
                      ^^建議改成 become
: Choco: That sounds great!
:        Oops, sorry, I have to go to find my friends. I lost them for a moment.
: Lee: Sure, do you need some help? What are they wearing?
  建議可改成 What do they look like?^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
: Choco: They are both tall and thin, wearing in white and black hats.
                                              ^^刪
: Lee: I saw them in the toilet 5 minutes before.
:      Maybe you can find them that way.
                              ^建議加 toward (或改成 toward that direction)
                               不然that way解釋比較像"那個方式"
: Choco: Thank you! Nice talking to you. See you later!
                    ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
           建議改成 It was nice talking to you.
: Lee: Me too. See you later!


我覺得你的文法錯誤都只是小問題,整體來說非常的通順.
我讀的時候幾乎都不用停下來想說你在寫什麼.
建議的地方其實你沒錯,只是現實生活中那樣比較順,所以我打進來給你參考一下.
整體來說你寫的不錯,多練練就會更上手了. 加油喔!!! --T

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推 diddy:感謝B大幫忙修正  整數給稅前1000P ^^
推 diddy:如果還有其他需要修正的地方還請大家多多幫忙  P幣一定奉上
推 diddy:想請問各位大大  有哪幾句是的確文法有錯的?
→ diddy:I'm a chef working in the restaurant next street.
→ diddy:Are you still a student?
→ diddy:I'm studying Japanese.
→ diddy:I'm his older brother.
→ diddy:Are you interested in basketball?
→ diddy:All my friends love what I cook.
→ diddy:除了這幾句以外還有哪裡是確定有錯誤的嗎? 謝謝大家<(_ _)>
→ BenSmithVII:謝謝你的慷慨,這對一個ptt新手幫助很大@"@!! 已回信!
推 diddy:感謝B大仔細的幫忙修改  獲益良多 <(_ _)>
推 malisse74:next street有點怪-->on the street nearby
→ malisse74:壽星夠熟可以用birthday boy/girl
→ malisse74:go to find應為 go (and) find, and通常省略
→ malisse74:in the toilet也會有怪聯想-->in the restroom
推 diddy:next street那句是課本例句  囧
→ diddy:壽星後來B大建議我翻譯成birthday star
→ diddy:go to +V 意思不是去執行這個動作嗎? @@"
→ BenSmithVII:next street其實沒問題. toilet 就連在美國也是用來
→ BenSmithVII:指廁所. 所以這樣子是也可以.
→ BenSmithVII:至於壽星, 我覺得用 birthday star 算最簡單的,
→ BenSmithVII:就跟月餅翻 moon cake 差不多, 地區特有用語吧.
→ BenSmithVII:to go find, to go and find, to go to find 都通.
→ BenSmithVII:不過m大說的 to go find 倒是比較常用,因為省字 XD
推 diddy:再問幾個問題QQ 朋友跟我說切勿用You look so young
→ diddy:建議改成You are so young比較好?(前者是有貶意嗎?)
→ diddy:後面問對方身分用how/what about you,what跟how有什麼不同?
→ diddy:還有How/What do they look like? 用How跟What有什麼差異?
→ diddy:it's nice talking to you.用現在式is跟過去式was的不同點?
→ diddy:朋友說若還沒要離開,說it's nice to talk to you可能比較好
→ diddy:然後也不要see you later..我以為這句是客套的結束話題用句?
→ diddy:這樣討論下來發現我的英文真的很糟糕啊orz  感謝大家指教Q_Q
→ BenSmithVII:You look young 跟這句所有的變化是可以暗指對方年輕
→ BenSmithVII:所以可能無法勝任某些工作. 但是要看你用在哪裡.
→ BenSmithVII:如果你只是在一般對話中稱讚女性朋友的話算是讚美 0.0
→ BenSmithVII:不然直接說 You look 18. 或任何一個算很年輕的年齡
→ BenSmithVII:也可以.
→ BenSmithVII:What do they look like? 是問他人外觀.
→ BenSmithVII:How do they look? 可以問別人的表現如何(工作,等.)
→ BenSmithVII:It is/was 都行. Was強調你有真的喜歡"剛剛"的談話,
→ BenSmithVII:至少我的感覺是這樣...
→ BenSmithVII:See/talk to you later. Later. See you. 都行,看情況
→ BenSmithVII:爽就好 0..0
推 diddy:那反問對方跟壽星的關係是不是what about you比較好?
→ diddy:Do you need some help的help需要+s嗎? 菇狗發現兩種都有
→ BenSmithVII:問 "Do you know (壽星名)?" 是最簡單的方式.
→ diddy:另外有人說 五分鐘前要用ago不能用before(?) 有這回事?@_@
→ BenSmithVII:Help 一般是用單數. 所以你那句不須加s.
→ diddy:因為題目設定沒有壽星名字啊  我也很想創一個出來 XDDD
→ BenSmithVII:那要看整句比較好說. 如果你想說某某在5分鐘前就先
→ BenSmithVII:就先離開了: "He left 5 minutes ago."
→ BenSmithVII:Before 一般是在事件未發生前. 例: 我必須在 1:30 前
→ BenSmithVII:離開: "I need to leave before 1:30."
→ BenSmithVII:這樣說一說,我發現是中文的"前"在造成你的困擾 0..0
→ BenSmithVII:  我明天有個考試,所以接下來的問題我改天再回答囉0.0
推 diddy:了解了,所以還是用ago比較恰當  再次謝謝B大大力幫忙>///<
推 diddy:謝謝m大還有B大後續的幫忙  再另外包稅前300P跟500P表示謝意
→ BenSmithVII:很高興能幫到你的忙!
推 malisse74:d大太客氣了 以前美國待很久時間 多少就是憑語感
→ malisse74:所以會在聽起來比較不順的地方直接提出