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[Victor0802 (獨特)]

Below is my composition :



Topic : Why are you a night owl?



I am a night owl, being a night person has several advantages.

First, it is quiet at night so I can concentrate on my study.

Night is more peaceful and I am not afraid of being bothered by someone

or something. For example, I don’t have to worry about any of my friends

will ask me out when I am doing my work. The next advantage is that night

is beautiful and tranquil ; in other words, night cleanses my thoughts of

tiredness. After working long hours, I can walk on the street and bath with

moonlight. Soon I seem to have energy to face another challenge in high

spirits. In addition, I can breathe fresh air outside and the air at

night is much better than that of daytime because of fewer cars at

midnight. Furthermore, while I stay up late reading until dawn,

I can not only see the sunrise but also eat a bountiful breakfast.

After that, I take a stroll as exercise. Indeed, at night, it is not

easy to be disturbed by someone or something and I can control rhythms

much better than daytime. This is why I am a night owl.




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