Julien Gabel <jpeg@thilelli.net> writes:
> <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
> - created disk stripe.</para>
> + created disk stripe:</para>
It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
redundant in sentences that ends with ":".
In decreasing order of verbosity:
The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
disk stripe.
This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".
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