Re: docs/85353: Very little cosmetic/ponctuation changes for the

>>    <para>The following command can be used to manually mount a newly
>> -    created disk stripe.</para>
>> +    created disk stripe:</para>

> It's probably not worth changing, but I find "the following" to be
> redundant in sentences that ends with ":".

Agreed.

> In decreasing order of verbosity:
>
> The following command can be used to manually mount a newly created
> disk stripe.
>
> This command can be used to manually mount a newly created disk stripe:
>
> To manually mount a newly created disk stripe:

This one may be better i think, since it is more concise.

> And while opinions differ, IMO, it should be "newly-created".

Don't have a preference about this one.

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