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[vvjames (賤)]

年代久遠，小弟拋磚引玉寫個大概，
但是印象中的歌詞文法錯漏百出，
大學英文被當得一乾二淨(現在修日文)，待高手集思廣益囉
訂個真．矮動無雙4.9ff吧
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Birds are flying away in the sky.                    ○
The face I maybe know never returned.                returns? returned?
Don't wanna close my eyes in lonely night.           ○
Time without you by my side is alone with pain.      硬塞個be動詞進去有點不順

Know you, don't matter hurt me everytime.            簡直不懂 lol
My heart's seperated.                                跟上句語意不太通
I will do everything for you.                        ○
Yet 'cus I'm still in love with you...               ○

Sun is falling down in the sky.                      ○
The words I pray for you never returned.             returns? returned?
Children around the tree, cute baby,                 兩個路人甲佔一句..?
I don't wanna say goodbye to you forever!            ○

Know you, don't matter hurt me everytime.
My heart's seperated.
I will do everything for you.
Yet 'cus I'm still in love with you~

I can hold your cry, tell a lie,                     印象中是help u cry..怪?
and dream, smile tonight.                            動詞有點多，但無礙
Your picture's always by my side.                    ○
Oh~ My tear's dry. Leave ME alone!                   淚流盡用dry會太豪洨吧
Never risks, never dies.                             格言?
Let me be your savior again.                         整首語氣用savior太扯了點


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