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[alan0311 (彥倫)]

半年以後打算考托福，不過不打算補習

問題就出在作文沒人可以幫我看

以下這篇是我用25分鐘左右寫出來的作文

題目是來自真題

能否有人給我一意見呢？

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Letting a friend make a mistake is better than saying or doing something
which will destroy the friendship.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

    Regarding of supporting or disagreeing with the statement, I think that

both of them have their own proponents. In my opinion, I think that letting a

friend make a mistake is better.

    First, everyone is an unique individual. I do not need to be as though

I were a teacher, and always trying to make an influence on others. I have

made lots of comments on my best friend's behavior because I think he should

pay more attention to the lectures. However, he is a person who prefers to

study by himself, and he cannot listen to the lecture concentratedly.

    Second, everyone has the rights to try by themselves. When I was in the

junior high school, one of my friends had problems on math. Being a good

friend of him, person who often got the best grades on math in class, I

considered myself to be the most suitable person to teach her. After teaching

her how to solve the problems for a month, I found that my methods were wrong.

I didn't leave some time for her to think and try to solve the problems by

herself, so she just memorized the solutions written. It's obvious that my

friend didn't get enough chance to try.

    Third, my suggestions is not always correct. I ususlly got first prize on

the exams in high school, so I was proud and consider myself the smartest

person in class. "Stupid people should obey to my opinions," I once thought

so. One of my friends was the class leader. He sometimes consults me with the

leading policy, but some of them were not good or even made him blamed by the

teacher. After a while, my friend didn't trust me as before. I should let him

make his own decisions because I am not a perfect person as well.

    Treating friends as an individual is important. Everyone has their right

to make up their own decisions, and he must be responsible for them. From

the reasons above, I think that letting a friend make a mistake is better than

saying or doing something which will destroy the friendship.

還沒有想好自己的模版要用如何的，所以先這樣子寫。

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