推 earnest :感謝文法大師指點 12/21 01:38
→ earnest :我想大家應該是不會完全照抄的～ 12/21 01:38
→ earnest :畢竟我就只想點還不錯而已，其他就見笑了 12/21 01:39
→ earnest :請同學不要學！ 12/21 01:39
→ xiezl :太客氣了，在這裡沒人敢稱大師，互相學習而已。 12/21 09:31
※ 引述《earnest (大衛)》之銘言：
推一下大衛的熱心。
不過原 po 解答中用字與文法錯誤有點多。
下一篇口說中的文法錯誤比較不會被抓到，
但是寫作的就難說了，因此想要照抄解答的人要注意一點。
下面更正一些用字與文法錯誤。
: 雖然不知道這麼晚了還有沒有人看得到，還是PO 一下吧！
: 沒看到的同學對不起。。下次我會早點PO 的！
: 獨立寫作對多數同學最難的就是想點，以下針對12/21 最容易考的機經題，
: 分享我想的幾個點：
: 題目：Agree or Disagree: The ads now are dishonest and it’s
: difficult for people to purchase items based on the ads.
: （來源：J2 TOEFL 機經 20131221 版）
: 解題：題目在問的是，「因為」現在的廣告不誠實，「所以」消費者購買產
: 品就很難依賴廣告了，
: 後者是結論，答案要答的就是「消費者很難依賴廣告」，贊成與否？
: 依據英文邏輯，要提出的三個原因，應該解釋「為什麼」現在的廣告不誠實
: 或誠實。
: 以下就正反各提出三個原因，供參考：
: Agree (ads now are dishonest):
首先應該沒有 ads now are dishonest 這個說法。
now 是副詞，要放在 are 的後面，不該在前面。
另外這句話很明顯是中式英文。
我剛谷歌了一下，全網路裡只有這篇文章用這個表達法。至於原來題
目是什麼，那可能就要請問大衛這題目是從哪找來的？
: 1) Companies can make big profits from dishonest ads. That is to
: say, companies would often exaggerate in their ads, to attract
: more consumers to purchase their products.
: 接著舉例，例如說麥當勞的漢堡，看起來很豐滿，可是拿到手的時候只有癟
: 癟的五公分。
ads, to attract 中的逗點要去掉。
: 2) Companies would need to spend extra costs to renew their ads to
: make them always real. To be more specific, companies would have
: lower profit if they always change their ads, according to how
: their products have changed.
: 舉例，產品每半年換一次，但廣告不會變，etc.
spend costs 是中式英文，改成 spend money 就好。整句可以寫成
Companies need to spend extra money to update their ads to
reflect what their products really are.
lower profit -> lower profits
their ads, according -> 去掉逗點，否則意思會錯
: 3) Companies face strong marketing competitions from similar
: businesses, so they would have to cheat a little on their ads, in
: order to make them stand out and get attention from the consumers.
: That means, companies often have to make their ads different,
: even though that might mean they're being dishonest.
: 舉例，例如說牛肉麵，Ａ店的照片有兩塊肉，Ｂ店的照片上面就不但有肉，
: 還有很多青菜，結果上來了只是蔥花一片，etc.
marketing competitions 是「行銷競賽」不是「市場競爭」
competition 當「競爭」時是不可數名詞，「競賽」時才可數
「市場競爭」應該是 market competition
on their ads, in order -> in their ads in order (去掉逗點)
make them stand out -> make themselves stand out
from the consumers -> from consumers
they're being dishonest -> the ads would be dishonest
沒理由用現在進行式。they 會指到 companies，要改成 the ads
: Disagree (ads now are honest)
: 1) Companies are afraid of the government fines on dishonest ads.
: That is to say, in order to protect the consumers, nowadays a lot
: of governments have a big fines on dishonest ads,
: therefore companies tend to be more cautious with what
: they say on the ads.
: 舉例，某某食品公司因產品與實物不符，官員勒令賠償，很傷，etc.
fines on dishonest ads -> fines for dishonest ads
protect the consumers -> protect consumers
have a big fines on -> impose/levy big fines for
既然是 fines 怎會有 a？
therefore -> and therefore
therefore 是副詞，不能連接子句
on the ads -> in the ads
: 2) Companies are scared to lose reputation which would result in less
: profit. To be more specific, thanks to the Internet, nowadays the
: ads are often examined by a lot of users, so the companies dare
: not to risk having dishonest ads as the consumers would easily
: find out.
: 舉例，掰一個公司被在線上抓包的例子，例如假心得文，etc.
lose reputation -> lose their reputation
which would -> , which would
這裡要用非限定關係子句，所以要逗點
less profit -> lower profits
profit 是可數名詞，不能用 less 來修飾
the ads are -> ads are
so the companies -> so companies
having dishonest ads -> taking out/placing dishonest ads
as the consumers -> as consumers
特定人、物才用定冠詞 the
easily find out -> easily find the scam out
find 是及物動詞，要接受詞
: 3) Companies don't have time to deal with unsatisfied user
: complaints resulted from dishonest ads. That means, most consumers
: nowadays would go to the companies and ask for their rights, or
: money back, when they realize the products or services are not as
: described in the ads.
: 舉例，廣告可以退費，但退費不成功，消費者就會花時間死纏爛打，公司就
: 會被搞煩，最後只好掏錢。
unsatisfied user complaints -> unsatisfied users' complaints
resulted from -> resulting from
以上的修正部分，提供給要直接抄答案的同學做參考。
謝忠理
: 請同學不要忘記，關鍵在于指出「為什麼」廣告會不誠實會誠實，「消費者
: 無法依賴廣告購買」只是一個結果，不要過度討論！
: 而如何解釋為什麼「廣告會不誠實或誠實」？就要探討廣告主的心態，他們
: 在意什麼。所以我的每個理由的開頭都是「廣告業主」，the companies.
: 以上給出了一些topic sentence，也提到一些描述廣告主、消費者、產品的
: 關鍵字，例子就請各位自己發揮吧！
: 祝各位明天好運，考試順利！
: ~ SK2 David
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