[分享] 1/18 J2 TOEFL 獨立寫作擬答

[SKTWORosa (SK2Toefl Rosa)]

大家好！我是Rosa，今天有點時間，以下這一題是根據J2 TOEFL的1/18機經做擬答。
在此註明，我和David的想點邏輯不一樣，大家可以使用自己習慣的邏輯。

首先請先想好點，form一個簡單的concept map再下筆。

想點：artist需要什麼？他們可以為政府帶來什麼？可以自己取得資源還是由政府給？
政府支持有甚麼好處壞處？自己自足有甚麼好處壞處？

Concept map:
Opinion: government should support artists
R1: art shows the characteristic of a society.
R2: art can entertain citizens.
R3: When artists support themselves,
they might not have enough time to improve their work.

想完三個理由後，再開始寫。
第一個段落和最後一個段落不需要寫太多，第一個段落其實只有最後一句話的thesis
statement是最重要的，請務必表達清楚。

    People often possess different perspectives on the issue of whether the
government should support artists or not. This matter is indeed controversial
. While some believe that the state should support artists, others maintain
that this would bring about greater disaster. As for me, I strongly argue
that the government should indeed support artists.

再來是中間段落，第一句話的topic sentence非常重要。要寫得簡單清楚，讓rater好
一次就看懂。假如能寫得簡單清楚，就成功一半了喔！切記，請不要去解釋理由的理由
，台灣的同學常會太過於注重解釋理由而忘了實際給予例子支持的重要性。

    First of all, art displays the characteristic of a society. Therefore,
the government should support artists. For example, a Taiwanese painter,
Huang Yon-Tsan, is good at drawing paintings of the nature. That is to say,
through his art, people get a glimpse of the beautiful scenery and the
creatures in Taiwan. Furthermore, Picasso depicts a society which places
emphasis on leisure and on sitting around drinking tea with beautiful women.
Through his art, people can imagine what life was like at that
period in France.

    Secondly, art can provide citizens with entertainment. As a result, the
government should sponsor artists. For instance, after a long week of work,
people often go to art exhibitions and discuss various pieces of great work
together with family and friends. To be more specific, art help lift the mood
of people and give them a lot of pleasure. Apparently, as far as the government
 is concerned, supporting artists can bring crucial benefits to its people.

Last but not least, when artists support themselves, they might spend all their
 time earning a living, instead of improving their works. Take my personal
experience as an example. My cousin is an extremely talented artist. However,
he worked day and night in restaurants trying to make ends meet. Eventually,
he did not have time for painting and gave up.

最後一個段落簡單做個總結就好了，假如你不太會summarize三個段落的重點，沒辦法變成
三個很漂亮平行的名詞，如：due to N, N, and N，那麼就省略不寫吧！單純把你的論點
立場講清楚即可。

     In conclusion, I strongly maintain that it is beneficial for the
government to support artists. To be more specific, it is not only advantageous
 for the artists but also beneficial for the government.

審題和想點本來就比較難，中間三個段落假如能夠想好例子，實際打字的時間不需要太長
。開頭與結論段可以事先想好簡單的模版(如上)，考試時請把時間花在中間三段上面。

祝大家明天考試順利！:D

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推 NYandLA     :推Rosa 認真的好老師
→ angryangel  :感謝分享! 我比較知道conclusion 要怎麼寫了!
→ angryangel  :不過，作文題目是甚麼? Rosa 老師忘記寫出來了
→ SKTWORosa   :The government should support artists or should
→ SKTWORosa   :artists support themselves?(獨立寫作題目)
推 angryangel  :謝謝Rosa老師
推 xiezl       :Rosa老師很熱心。
→ xiezl       :不過中間三段的主題句格式都不對，並沒有將主題包含
→ xiezl       :在主題句裡。另外文法和轉折語的使用，應該要小心些
→ xiezl       :目前的內容錯得有點多。
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