Re: [中英] 期許客戶給予報價機會的商業書信

[lifegetter (白浪)]

※ 引述《mondena (專心準備考試囉)》之銘言：
: 各位大大好~
: 依照我自己原本的中文~
: 我大概把英文寫成這樣~
: ==========================================================
: Dear Savill
: First of all, thank you for your time to read my letter,
: and raised a legitimate concern, that both show you have
: great interest in our company.
: 您好，首先感謝您閱讀敝公司之信件並提出您的看法，
: 此皆顯示您對敝公司之重視。

We would like to thank you for your close attention to our letter
and your invaluable comments. We really appreciate your interest
in our company.

: We are able to offer the samples of the production at once,
: under the premise that you agreed and provided us the
: details (ex: drawings). We must grasp the opportunity you bestow,
: and meet your satisfaction.
: 若您願意賜予敝公司服務的機會，敝公司可以立刻提供貴公司此項產品之樣本
: ，當然，此舉一定是在您認同許可並提供該產品細節資訊(例如：圖面)的情況
: 之下，敝公司可以保證樣本絕不會讓您失望及不滿。

We can provide immediately the product samples upon request; detailed
information (e.g., 圖面）is also available. Our company is committed to
client satisfaction and we are certain that you will not be disappointed.

: Our main purpose is to emphasize our technology and facilities
: enough to manufacturing the production, obviously, it's able to
: understand that you couldn't know the original intention without
: any business transactions between us.
: 針對此項產品，我們的目的是想突顯敝公司有足夠的能力與技術可以生產
: 及製造，顯然，可以理解的是，在雙方未曾有交流的情況之下，很難讓您
: 明白此項初衷
: Sincerely,
: ==========================================================
: 請問這樣時態和文法有正確嗎?
: 因為是自己練習寫的~希望可以聆聽各位大大的指教~
: 在翻譯成英文時~我有謹記版上大大們強調的"簡而易懂"~
: 可是又怕這樣的書信會讓新客戶覺得沒禮貌~(翻滾中)

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推 TheRock:typo: samplesupon->samples upon, centain->certain...
謝謝…該剪指甲了 XD

推 mondena:請問第二段第一句的分號是取代連接詞嗎? 另外若依照此寫法
→ mondena:是不是指提供是因為依照客戶要求? 感謝指導~
分號是斷句，但前後句的關係還是很密切。我寫的是跟公司要就會給；但是有些公司會先
寄過去給客戶參考，那就是 we have taken the liberty and sent you...
※ 編輯: lifegetter      來自: 210.240.238.97       (01/10 17:31)
→ usread:原文應是指若客戶提供細節,我方一定能做出令客戶滿意的樣本
→ usread:樣本必須made to the client's specification which has to
→ usread:be provided by the client.這是我對原文的解讀
→ tengharold:第三段沒人翻呀~
→ lifegetter:示範一下，點到為止吧 XD 其實商業英文很制式的