[創作] Dreams

[raphaella (秋月春風等閒度)]

Lightly I stepped across your blog
Softly I read your heart
Gently I understand your mind
Truly I know about your great love

Oh, how crystal clear your window is
That I cannot resist your charm
Though you never express your love
I can already feel your goodness

--
        I asked Jesus,
        " How much do You love me? "                   L
                                                     G O D
        " This much,"                                  V
        He stretched out His arms                      E 
        and died on the cross.

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※ 編輯: raphaella       來自: 125.233.72.37        (05/16 10:30)
→ spacedunce5:beautiful! but last line's rime is
→ spacedunce5:a bit jarring because it is
→ spacedunce5:feminine whereas all the other
→ spacedunce5:lines' are masculine; but maybe you
→ spacedunce5:are expressing the feeling of
→ spacedunce5:unrequited love?
→ raphaella:是的，不求報償
推 celestial09:讚喔  別無所求^^
→ raphaella:其實整首詩都是 feminine
→ spacedunce5:masculine rimes end with a stressed
→ spacedunce5:syllable but feminine ones don't.
→ spacedunce5:it's just a name ^^
→ raphaella:感謝賜教
→ raphaella:所以我是虎頭蛇尾嗎XD
推 spacedunce5:有一點，不過如上所述和主題很配xd
推 ethelya:我愛你~原PO~
→ raphaella:趁亂告白嗎 XD
推 celestial09:哈哈哈 英詩版真是有趣好笑 XD
→ celestial09:btw, 原PO 是誰阿  不認識 ^^"