[創作] In the void b'tween barren land and aloof sky

[amadeus1223 (L'amor Celeste)]

In void b'tween the barren land and aloof sky,
  A dim spectre-like cavalier did stride---
  A wild drifter of cold and lonely pride,
Which bade him from his companions fly.
I saw afar his pale frame stiff and dry,
  So I greeted: "remote traveler, what side
  Art thou from, in such a sorrowful ride?"
His eyes pierced mine, yet granted me no reply.

And his fingers caressed an antique lyre.
  'Tis a wordless melody sweet but sad,
Soaring from the abyss of human mire;
  Enlightened was my heart with dullness clad
     To know the grief without a heartfelt ear:
     Albeit the strings were outworn, who would hear?*




*From 岳飛 小重山詞(知音少,絃斷有誰聽?)

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Where words fail, music speaks.

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※ 編輯: amadeus1223     來自: 140.119.203.47       (10/05 21:03)
推 spacedunce5:love the imagery!但出格也太多吧XD
→ amadeus1223:不好意思~出格是指格律嗎?
推 celestial09:like this one :D
→ celestial09:amadeus is absolutely talented in
→ celestial09:writing poems and rhyming! :D
→ amadeus1223:I am flattered:)
→ amadeus1223:but I'm not talented at all!
→ amadeus1223:writing poems is a hard work for me
推 hahastarr:lovely
→ spacedunce5:yes
→ amadeus1223:抑楊格真的太難了...
→ amadeus1223:我只能做到每句十音步這樣~
推 celestial09:抑揚格是什麼? ^^" 想請教 amadeus :P
→ amadeus1223:喔喔就是寫sonnet的話每句的都要
→ amadeus1223:iambic pentameter,一個非重音接一個
→ amadeus1223:重音,總共五組十個音節這樣!
→ amadeus1223:(有錯請高手指正~)可是真的很難
→ amadeus1223:所以我都是馬馬虎虎每句十音節就算了~
→ amadeus1223:抑揚就不去管他了
推 celestial09:呃。我都全部不管，也不知道 XD
推 hahastarr:也不知道 +1  XDD
→ celestial09:haha...握手 XD  我也不懂格律
※ 編輯: amadeus1223     來自: 140.119.203.47       (10/08 19:48)
→ amadeus1223:我覺得不被形式拘束也很棒啊!
→ amadeus1223:我用十四行詩的form有時候只是想讓自
→ amadeus1223:己寫的東西比較像"詩"~
→ spacedunce5:這年頭寫商籟體的人真的不多見！
※ 編輯: amadeus1223     來自: 140.119.203.47       (10/16 22:49)