Re: [閒聊]研究生寫的自我介紹

[liton (歐吉桑留學生)]

: 以下為原稿：
:
: Although I've pass the entrance exam of NTU, but I still not get enough
: information about what I will be interested in the future, so I hope after
: the conversation, I can know more about professor's major research areas.
:
: 我想了想，又問了我朋友這位天兵研究生是什麼狀況，然後幫他改成：
:
: I was very lucky to pass the entrance exam and got admitted to National
  ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
: Taiwan University. As a graduate student, I need to find an advisor who can
  ^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^  and 前和後不都是講同一件事? 整句是廢話
                     通過入學是找指導教授的資格  不是honor
: offer me professional advices in terms of my future research.
                                ^^^^^^^^^^^ 這是"以..而言"
                        advice on(about) sth
:I have talked to some upperclassmates and heard about you.
 還原這句  I have talked....and I heard about you..
 and 在這句是講兩件沒前後關係的事情
 整句又在那邊繞來繞去
 Some upperclassmates suggested~~balabala

:I am very interested in your area and I believe that I will
                              ^^^^ area?? living area?講清楚
:learn the most from you. Therefore, I humbly

: ask for a chance to speak with you in order to find out more details and
: discuss our future research.
又是兩件同樣的事情  more details<-->our future research
怎感覺這句又在沒詞找字塞
講話講重點  文字的資訊密度請高一點
另外...discuss~research?教授都還沒答應收這個學生
這學生有啥資格跟他討論"our" future research
這學生瞎咪砍站?對等地位(如其他位教授)才能用這口氣吧

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→ tengharold:XD學生原文夠搞笑，但是我看過更爛的
→ tengharold:感覺L大註解有失中肯，原PO如此解釋蠻適中的
→ tengharold:文字"資訊密度"太高會看不懂前因後果
→ tengharold:而且研究生名義上是與教授共同做研究
→ tengharold:雖然實際上是教授的奴隸XD，所以"our"也ok
→ tengharold:很多都是文筆上的習慣差異吧
推 egghead:假定會收為學生 這部份沒有問題