推 nozomii:謝謝寶貴的意見!收穫很多!! 07/02 00:37
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※ 引述《nozomii (nozomi)》之銘言：
: ※ 引述《dvlin (Dee)》之銘言：
: : Choose one of the following topics.
: : 1. Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy
: : them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and
: : examples to support your opinion.
: I prefer to preserve the old, historic buildings of a city than destroy
: all of them. First, the old buildings are the symbol of culture. The design
: and the building skills of the old buildings are always the best teacher to
-------------------? ------too absolute
: teacher us the beauty of that place.
teach
* It is better that evidence can be provided for this argument (even in
just one sentence).
: Second,the old buildings stand for the past time of that place. Because
, the
: the buildings are not removable, they stand there since they were built and
have stood
: have seen all the things happened there. They are the best teller and
: evidences to tell all stories of the city.
evidence
* evidence it a non-count noun.
: For example, my home town, Tainan, preserves a lot of old, historic
: buildings and famous for these buildings in Taiwan. It is really a good
For example, there are a lot of old, historic buildings preserved in Tainan,
which are very famous in Taiwan.
: opportunity for people to know the culture and history through these old
: buildings, and it is also the most important reason why to perserve the
for preserving
: old buildings.
: In conclusion, there are some reasons that why we should to preserve the
xx
: old and historic buildings instand of destroying all of them. Because of the
instead
: development of the modern city these days, it is usually hard to make a
: balance between the old building and modern ones. However, preserving the old
What do you mean by "making a balance between the old...and modern ones"?
I personally think that the sentence is unclear. @@
: buildings still has his own reasons and important meanings of the culture and
its
* But it is recommended that you rephrase the sentence.
: history of a city. It is why I prefer that a city should preserve the old,
: historic buildings than destroy all of them.
* General comments:
There are not many grammatical errors.
The only problem is that there is only one point throughout the essay:
old buildings could be good material for the citizens to know their culture
and history. But in paragraph 2 and 3, there are only repeated statements
that "old buildings" could teach the people of the city many things;
there is little solid evidence provided to support the argument.
The language is good, the essay very smooth, but the argument is not
very convincing.
For your reference. ^^;
fleuve
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