[字辨] 這句話的I用法正確嗎

[dimmed (無詩詩人)]

When the emcee uttered my name at third place, I, totally

astonished, exclaimed with disbelief and ecstasy.


感覺I的用法好像沒錯

應該是後面那句補充的該加being變成

..., I, being totally astonished, exclaimed with disbelief and ecstasy.

這樣對嗎

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