[文法] 我的自傳 可以幫我看看嗎

[RichieChen (拒看懶散的職業棒球)]

各位前輩好

以下是我的自傳 面試用的簡易自傳

想請各位前輩幫我看看哪裡有錯好嗎?

謝謝

My name is Richie.

I am twenty-five years old.

I'm interested in sports, music, movie, and research on business and English.

I love thinking .

It's very helpful to me.


I think thinking makes people develop unique thinking systems .

Which is very important nowadays.

I like to help somebody people who need help

I like to touch with people because I can study many things from different
people especially foreigner.
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I can learning about different cultures and thinkings.

I really enjoy it.

I'm a honest, humorous and friendly person who attracts children and adults
alike.

I have taught foreigner Chinese for one year.

I know some teaching skills and I think my conversation skills are better than
average people.

I think if I get the job,I can do it well.

Thank you for your listening.

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