→ djviva:update...share with u all, not will 11/30 11:40
推 berber33:thanks a lot!!!! this is much more better!!!!! 11/30 17:11
Dear judges and friends, my name is XX Lee from Dept. of transportation
management. This is my last year in school, also, my last singing competition
here.
Today I bring you a classic lovely song with myself that is "can't take my eyes
off you". This is one of my favorite and I'd like to share it will you all.
Hope all of you will enjoy it like I do. Thank you!
1. Dear... is more formal and proper for a competition
2. Donot use I...and I... in one sentance.
3. Classic is the right one, not classical.
4. Read it after you finish your own artical to see if it's fluent.
Good luck!
※ 引述《berber33 (找房子中~~)》之銘言：
: Hello everyone,
: i m going to be one of the contestant in a english singing contest tomorrow
: before i sing the song i would like do a short introduction.
: "
: Hello my all my friends, judges and everyone, my name is lee, i m from department of shipping and
: transportation management, this is my last year in school, so this will be my
: last singing competition.
: Today i brought u all a classical love song, "can't take my eyes off you", i
: love this song and i want to share this song with all of u , hope u all will
: enjoy it ! thank you !!
: "
: pls do me a favour to make it better??
: thank you guys!!
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