Re: [寫作班] Christmas / Physheepy

[iris0542 (gg)]

※ 引述《physheepy ()》之銘言：
:     When it comes to Christmas, we think about gifts, glittery decorations,
: and riotous parties. People enjoy themselves on their Christmas vacation. They
: go to concert or party in fancy dress. They enjoy an extravagant big meal.
        ocncerts   parties        dresses
: They buy expensive presents and cards to friends and family members. They say
: "Merry Christmas and Happy New year." as greetings. Everything seems joyful
  我不知道這邊的標點符號這樣用行不行ㄝ~~
  感覺上直接刪掉"和.  比較安全..麻煩知道的人提供一下意見
: because a whole new year is coming.
:     However, not all people can have a merry Christmas.When we are planning
: the activities for Christmas celebration, many people, especially in the
: undeveloped countries, are suffering and struggling for just living. When
: we are over-full and throw away the surplus food into trash cans, there
                                   X
: are many people dying of starvation and illness. What a big contrast it is!
:    I don't mean to dampen anybody's joy at this important festival. We are
: busy in hard-working for the whole year and it's a good time to take a break
                            a
: with family. However, I think we should keep in mind that we are the lucky
      ^our                                                           luckiest
: ones. Not all people have the rights to enjoy at Christmas. We should be
: grateful for our fortune and treasure what we own. If you have the ability and
                                        that                      X
: opportunity, try to help the unfortunate people. Share the happiness and bring
: merry Christmas to them --just like what Santa Clause do. I think it will
                                                 Claus  does
: take more joys to you than just a big meal or a party.
  bring     joy我想應該是不可數的


  Your wirting skill is quite high! I am expecting your next article.^^

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推 djnospam:Year(Y大寫)後面的句號要刪掉
推 physheepy:Thank you! I made some very silly mistakes :)
推 physheepy:I check the definition in the Longman dictionary.
→ physheepy:It says "dress" is an uncountable noun when it
→ physheepy:refers to clothes for men of a particular type
→ physheepy:So I use "dress" here instead of "dresses"
→ physheepy:I'm a little confused. Maybe we can have further
→ physheepy:discussions about it.