A Thousand Fitful Nights
by esoror/rorose
1
They came
At the warrior's feet,
Stepping on the wax of my fear.
"Out, out, you are free."
That's what they've said to me.
2
They came
Through a thousand voices,
Pounding on the nerve of my brain.
"A thousand fitful nights have gone by;"
It's time to get out & fight."
3
A thousand brave women have come by,
Inviting me to join the sacred fight.
"Join us, claim your right to the world,
You'll find your life can go as all you wish."
4
A thousand fitful nights have gone by;
I am freed, but I did not feel alright.
For only do the thousand brave women
Enjoy the fruit of the sacred fight.
Life's still not as my wish
Nor does it leave the tinge of the night.
July 2000, May 2001, Dec 2001
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後面一半拖到今年才完成
因此一半算是今年的作品吧
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※ 編輯: esoror 來自: 140.115.201.29 (12/06 21:39)
※ 編輯: skyhawk 來自: 61.216.84.236 (12/07 01:44)
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作者: skyhawk (其實我並沒有贏..) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: A Thousand Fitful Nights
時間: Sat Dec 8 13:28:41 2001
※ 引述《esoror (烤焦麵包)》之銘言：
A Thousand Fitful Nights
by esoror/rorose
1
They came
At the warrior's feet,
Stepping on the wax of my fear.
"Out, out, you are free."
That's what they've said to me.
2
They came
Through a thousand voices,
Pounding on the nerve of my brain.
"A thousand fitful nights have gone by;"
It's time to get out & fight."
3
A thousand brave women have come by,
Inviting me to join the sacred fight.
"Join us, claim your right to the world,
You'll find your life can go as all you wish."
4
A thousand fitful nights have gone by;
I am freed, but I did not feel alright.
For only do the thousand brave women
Enjoy the fruit of the sacred fight.
Life's still not as my wish
Nor does it leave the tinge of the night.
July 2000, May 2001, Dec 2001
後面一半拖到今年才完成
因此一半算是今年的作品吧
嗯 .. 我猜猜看唷 ^^"
1-3 是去年的作品
4 是今年的?
(原因: 因為 4 突然用比較多的 full-rhyme)
用 half-rhyme 和 alliteration 編織起來的節奏感 .. 呵 .. 有趣
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作者: esoror (烤焦麵包) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: A Thousand Fitful Nights
時間: Sun Dec 9 11:56:37 2001
※ 引述《skyhawk (其實我並沒有贏..)》之銘言：
: 後面一半拖到今年才完成
: 因此一半算是今年的作品吧
: 嗯 .. 我猜猜看唷 ^^"
: 1-3 是去年的作品
: 4 是今年的?
: (原因: 因為 4 突然用比較多的 full-rhyme)
: 用 half-rhyme 和 alliteration 編織起來的節奏感 .. 呵 .. 有趣
啊 厲害厲害
接近了...3和4是今年的
前面兩節寫完的時候好像不知道要做什麼
所以就放了很久
rhyming並不是很刻意
我通常只是注意念起來好不好聽...:P
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作者: skyhawk (請找我下五子棋^^) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: A Thousand Fitful Nights
時間: Sun Dec 9 14:45:26 2001
※ 引述《esoror (烤焦麵包)》之銘言：
: ※ 引述《skyhawk (其實我並沒有贏..)》之銘言：
: : 後面一半拖到今年才完成
: : 因此一半算是今年的作品吧
: : 嗯 .. 我猜猜看唷 ^^"
: : 1-3 是去年的作品
: : 4 是今年的?
: : (原因: 因為 4 突然用比較多的 full-rhyme)
: : 用 half-rhyme 和 alliteration 編織起來的節奏感 .. 呵 .. 有趣
: 啊 厲害厲害
: 接近了...3和4是今年的
: 前面兩節寫完的時候好像不知道要做什麼
: 所以就放了很久
: rhyming並不是很刻意
: 我通常只是注意念起來好不好聽...:P
呼 還是猜錯了 ^^ 呵~
有的時候不知道該怎麼結尾的詩 不理它 等等再回來看
就發現知道該怎麼辦了 .. ^^