*---* 晚輩不才拙詩 煩請高手前輩一指迷津 感激不盡也......
~ THE HORROR! THE HORROR! ~
The invisible temperaments of thine
Act as dark side of the moon.
Glimmering of sombre twilight
Tears apart my faith upon our fellowship.
Thy jealous eyes used to be lingering shade
Hovering upon my innocnet state of mind,
Like specters residing in a dungeon that
Scare the unstained souls of those angelic children.
O O O O that songs of Satanic Rag,
Tempt me not!
Dash me not!
How I sincerely wish.....
How I endeavor not to crash.....
May the ardent Cupid strum his golden lyre
To soothe me, the vulnerable creature.
May the white dove brings forth
Tranquility, love, and peace
To Give, Sympathise, and Control the waste land
Of the human sphere.
How I wish....
How I cease to be.....
That's all, 2002.
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作者: skyhawk (冰城城主) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: 我寫的拙詩 西西 *---*
時間: Wed Sep 11 13:12:52 2002
Are you a fan of Eliot? ;)
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作者: PoetryLover (吉他在手極樂無窮) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: 我寫的拙詩 西西 *---*
時間: Wed Sep 11 13:17:25 2002
※ 引述《skyhawk (冰城城主)》之銘言：
: Are you a fan of Eliot? ;)
cc, including P.B. Shelly and John Bunyan !!
thx for your terse criticism.
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作者: skyhawk (冰城城主) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: 我寫的拙詩 西西 *---*
時間: Wed Sep 11 13:23:28 2002
※ 引述《PoetryLover (吉他在手極樂無窮)》之銘言：
: ※ 引述《skyhawk (冰城城主)》之銘言：
: : Are you a fan of Eliot? ;)
: cc, including P.B. Shelly and John Bunyan !!
: thx for your terse criticism.
ahh, I see...
I asked, because "O O O O" just reminded me of that Shakespeherian Rag.. :D
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作者: PoetryLover (吉他在手極樂無窮) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: 我寫的拙詩 西西 *---*
時間: Wed Sep 11 13:27:01 2002
※ 引述《skyhawk (冰城城主)》之銘言：
: ※ 引述《PoetryLover (吉他在手極樂無窮)》之銘言：
: : cc, including P.B. Shelly and John Bunyan !!
: : thx for your terse criticism.
: ahh, I see...
: I asked, because "O O O O" just reminded me of that Shakespeherian Rag.. :D
I am carzy for "The Waste Land." *---*
Because it depicts and foretells the impending crisis of human world.
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作者: julians (給我樂透其餘免談) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: 我寫的拙詩 西西 *---*
時間: Fri Sep 13 23:34:31 2002
※ 引述《PoetryLover (吉他在手極樂無窮)》之銘言：
: *---* 晚輩不才拙詩 煩請高手前輩一指迷津 感激不盡也......
: ~ THE HORROR! THE HORROR! ~
: The invisible temperaments of thine
: Act as dark side of the moon.
: Glimmering of sombre twilight
: Tears apart my faith upon our fellowship.
: Thy jealous eyes used to be lingering shade
: Hovering upon my innocnet state of mind,
: Like specters residing in a dungeon that
: Scare the unstained souls of those angelic children.
: O O O O that songs of Satanic Rag,
: Tempt me not!
: Dash me not!
: How I sincerely wish.....
: How I endeavor not to crash.....
: May the ardent Cupid strum his golden lyre
: To soothe me, the vulnerable creature.
: May the white dove brings forth
: Tranquility, love, and peace
: To Give, Sympathise, and Control the waste land
: Of the human sphere.
: How I wish....
: How I cease to be.....
: That's all, 2002.
I'am trying to be picky so that the deleted part only need three
periods. Oh, I'm picky and April is the cruellest month.
Give me somet lightening