ave interesting results, but I was unable
to continue when the commas appear toward the
end of the poem.

Anyway, lest I dissect the poem too barbarously:
why did you employ the commas at the end of the
poem?  (Or, from another perspective: why did you
abandon the punctuations at the beginning of the
poem?)

I'm convinced that you have a good, purposeful
reasoning in doing so, as your other poem employed
the same "flightly" grammatic feel.  ^_^

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