[創作] Garden

[PowLluimniz (波西米亞)]

 There beans, cabbages, carrots grow
 with the running vines of grapes
 and the golden rows of oranges
 in the sweet scent of mangos--
 all luscious, juicy, silver dewy,
 bathed in the raw odor of the earth.
 Yet if during the harvest season
 farmer of the garden surprisingly
 finds a rose in exuberant blossom,
 petals purple and stem emerald;
 what's that something occurs to him,
 mystery, profit, or treasure?


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作者: dale (冰城城主) 看板: poetry
標題: Re: [創作] Garden
時間: Sat Apr 23 22:27:34 2005

Even though the poem is not divided by stanzas,
but the contrast between the first six lines
and the last six lines are clear.

The first six lines contain a parade of "useful"
plants, e.g., beans, cabbages, etc., all of which
have obvious monetary values.  The last six lines,
on the other hand, are used to describe a single
rose.  This is plurality versus singularity,
planned versus unplanned -- a concerto, between
the rest of the band, and the majestic piano.

Which insinuates profoundly where the poet's
values reside: I'm guessing that he had
chosen something unworldly over something
mundane ... just a guess.
I like this poem, good work.  *^^*

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順便說一下：
我因為家裡有事，已經和小組長請假二到三週，
不過還是會不時找時間上來看看。大家要好好愛護這個板喔！
我就不另外發文公告了。^^

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