推 spacedunce5:nice imagery! you can work a bit more on the 10/08 12:53
→ spacedunce5:grammar tho 10/08 12:53
→ spacedunce5:tip: write it out in prose to check for problems 10/08 12:53
推 hahastarr:歡迎:) 10/10 06:48
October is always belongs to you, and your finger
Dancing with irregularly, I still remember it's Debussy
The one with romantic arabesque pattern on the notes
How can I forget the beauty of it?
When everything turns yellow, the time for you to dance
The beauty, oh, the beauty, like the dance, leaps up
My heart, as if I when to heaven
Falling down with you to the shadow under the piano
I still remember, the beauty,
It's your Debussy, your October
Yours, not ours.
第一次寫英詩
請多指教:)
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