[創作] Waiting For That Coming

[frolicker (像孩子般)]

For the reason that spacedunce5 mentioned the qualities of imagism and that
I am a fan of it, I would like to share a poem of this kind that I wrote
experimentally before.


Waiting For That Coming


I'm waiting for that coming
Which shall come
The sky is bright
And the clouds are white
And I keep waiting
With destruction of time
As the crowds going
As the clouds staying put
As the wind walking through me
Such slowness,
From which I want to run away
But I can't
Because of the lightest belief
Of that coming
But it's too light to hold on
Or even to be a thought
Which seems like a feeling
A slightest one that yells
Behind my back, fiercely but quietly
Having me stuck
Then...
An explosion!
Behind my back
And I can move again
Turning back to see－
Oh, I see in the dispersing smoke
An old face



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推 spacedunce5:yes, this poem has images, even
→ spacedunce5:perhaps coherent imagery, but it
→ spacedunce5:also has internal thoughts, will,
→ spacedunce5:feeling----all of which foreground
→ spacedunce5:the speaker-observer; so would this
→ spacedunce5:poem be categorized as imagist?
→ frolicker:thanks for commenting! :) it is a
→ frolicker:imagistic poem definitely. I wrote it
→ frolicker:to express that we're all stuck in
→ frolicker:endless pursuit of some unachievable
→ frolicker:dream, and when we finally get rid of
→ frolicker:such pursuit, we're old...
→ frolicker:would my explanation obstruct
→ frolicker:readers' imagination? I dont hope so.
→ frolicker:oh! i'm so sorry that i mis-typed ur
→ frolicker:name... Apology!
推 spacedunce5:this type of composition is what I
→ spacedunce5:support over "pure" imagery, which
→ spacedunce5:is what i meant by imagism
→ spacedunce5:it's okay, 大E修文XDDD
→ frolicker:好啦 我E就是了~XD
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