[創作] Epiphany

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Epiphany


Epiphany is a bubble
That wafts in the sky --
And sparkles within a moment
Before you could recognize.

Watch out your carelessness, and
Beware of your eagerness. 'Cause
The former let it slip, while
The latter pierced it right

Hence capture its beauty
Once you realize.



最後兩句總覺得有點奇怪...同學也說若不解釋他們看不懂這兩句...
不知道大家可否給我一點建議？
而且recognize、realize都是及物動詞
若是放在詩中，卻沒有後面的受詞不知道可不可行？
我第二次寫詩...寫得不好><...請大家多多指教，謝謝:)

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It takes considerable knowledge to realize the extent of my own ignorance.

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