1. Explain why I had this kind of experience, and where I went for summer
vacation.
2. Describe the way, how hard it was and the natural view and the feeling I
had on that time.
3. Brief some afterthoughts about the trip.
EngAbs:
In order to have something different in my life, I went to mountain climbing.
However, it was not as easy as I thought, especially the passage near the
peak. The road was rocky. I had to walk in caution for fear that I might fall
down from the mountain. I was so tired that the view was not beautiful, but
vague. The things that I encountered and saw became obstacles to me, such as
the plants and the rocks. Every step I had was a hard work for me to
accomplish. The whole process seemed a torture to me.
ChiAbs:
今年七月暑假，想做一些不一樣的事情，我和我的同學決定參加登山隊一起去爬八天七夜
的聖稜線。到半山腰時，感覺到整個體力出現透支與疲累，尤其是快要接近雪山主峰的那
段路，我開始感到腳不聽使喚，精神不濟、恍惚等狀況，眼前的景象完全模糊不清，彷彿
世界離我很遙遠。整段只有幾公尺的路變成漫漫長路，得花加倍的精神與體力達到山頂。
Text:
The torture-like experience of the mountain climbing
This summer vacation, I wanted to have a whole-new experience towards life.
As a result, my friends and I decided to have an eight-day Holy ridgeline
mountain climbing which started from the Dajian Mountain to the Snow
Mountain. However, the situation was really beyond my imagination and my
physical ability.
Although the road, which led me up to the top of the Snow Mountain, was
only about three meters left, the left distance, for me, seemed a
three-kilometer rocky journey that would exhaust every bit of my energy. The
passage to the final goal was composed of rubbles, which constantly impeded
my progression. Whenever I stepped on the rocky road, my 54-kilogram weight
made some rocks roll down the mountain valley. The sounds of the falling
rocks made my heart beat nervously. The thorns of Taiwan Juniper waited the
perfect time to scratch me unawares. The plants occupied the merely narrow
way, dragging me away from the normal speed. There was no charming
diminishing ray of the sun spilling over the mountains. Instead, the fierce
sun ray bit my skin violently and cruelly. The thin cloud in the sky was not
enough to cover the torrid sun ray. The temperature was getting higher, and
the heat was unendurable. The sweat wetted my sport shirt and handkerchief. I
was like a burnt cookie struggling in the oven. The smell of my sweat made me
feel that I was in the putrid swamp walking slowly. Somehow, it made me
confused that whether I was on the mountain climbing or I was a camel which
suffered almost 20-kilogram stuff staggering in a desert. The wind filled
with fatigue and toil hit my nostrils. The tiredness filled my vein, making
me feel painful as if the air in my lung had been pulled out. My heart was
pounding so heavily that pumped the enough blood and oxygen to my legs and
arms. Only by this way, I could support my body to move forward. The
so-called magnificent and overwhelming scenery twisted in front of my eyes.
All the colors were mixing together. The sweat kept rolling down from my
face. My team members already reached the top except me. I was still
struggling in the hell, like in a torture. The cheers which arose from them
were the most satiric thing. It formed a strong comparison between them and
me.
After the unforgettable experience, the picture that I stepped hard to
reach the top craved in my heart, including the atmosphere, mood, and the
terribly physical situation. Although it happened on July, I still could
vividly remember the details about that time.
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ConNotes: ConNotes / Response
comments1: Judge the details whether they are related to the topic
feedback 1: I delete some part of my article to make the article in a whole
shape
comments2: The way of separating the paragraphs should be considered
carefully.
Feedback2: I combine the paragraphs together, and also do some modification.
Comments3: have more focus on the other feeling
feedback 3: add the other feeling in the description.
MyRes: MyRes