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[aihosea (我在彰化*吃肉圓)]

    英文寫作沒有很好，請大家幫忙改一下，謝謝


Hello,
I would like to tell you a little bit about myself. My name is XXX.

I graduated from XXX University with Chemistry bachelor’s degree in
Chemistry.


I had worked at Kitchen for 1 year and 6 months in Australia.
As a kitchen hand, I must have to learn everything as soon as possible.
I had to prepare the food for chef, to move the stuff.
我要準備食物，搬貨物。

Besides, I was in charge of order the stuff or refund the wrong stuff.
The reason why I choose the Working holiday in Australia is earning more
money, knowing the different culture.
除此之外，我要負責訂貨退貨。我選擇澳洲打工度假的原因是，賺錢，體驗

不同的文化。

I had worked at XXX as an assistant engineer for almost 2 years.
The job is about to clean the machine, measure the vibration of the machine
and communicate with the Miss of assemble-line what is the proper time to
maintenance.

我在某公司當助理工程師兩年。工作內容是清潔機台，量測機台的震度，
和小姐交涉，在適當的時機，作機台保養。

My strength is that I’m a fast learner, cautious and multi-tasking.
I hope I can join your team.
Thanks for your listening.

我的優點是學得很快，細心謹慎、可以多工處理。



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