[請益] 新鮮人英文自傳請求批閱

[toplayer (反璞歸真)]

上月底剛取得學位 目前準備求職

雖知道有博士學歷還上來問英文有點丟臉

但我相信術業有專攻 板上的各路高手一定能給出更好的建議



手邊沒有太多P幣 願意回文或站內信給予建議的好心人將以稅前500P答謝

推文建議的則斟酌情形發送P幣 先謝過大家了！


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以下內容將放在Linkedin的Summary中：


I received my Ph.D. degree in XXX from XXX University in the end of this
summer. My doctoral dissertation was focused on the development of a novel
pattern coating technique –“XXX Coating.” In order to bring this brand
new technique alive, I built up several systems with multidisciplinary
knowledge/skills such as coatings, microfluidics, microfiber optics,
mechanical & electrical controls, CNC micro-machining, and digital image
processing. With years of striving, I have found the key of parallel
scale-up and established a great foundation of mass production for XXX
Coating.

During my study, I participated in 10 research projects and gained strong
experiences in multiple engineering fields especially in coatings and
microfluidics. Instead of trial-and-error, theoretical and numerical
approaches are my reliable tools to solve issues. The multidisciplinary
training also makes me a good problem solver in engineering. In 20XX, I
volunteered to be the conference secretary of the XXX symposium with 92
participants from 7 countries. This special experience has shaped me
into a good listener that can perceive the actual needs of others even in
different cultures. This characteristic helps me to work efficiently in
international teams.

I’m currently freelancing and pursuing new opportunities. Although I’m
new to the industry, I have numerous possibilities. I’m well-trained and
well-prepared for facing new challenges.



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推 b9910: 大致上沒問題. 建議不要過度修正,忠實反映英語水平即可.
→ b9910: 畢竟人家會僱用你不是因為你英文好,而是看專業.
→ b9910: 此外,最後一段可以省略.讓自傳更精簡.
推 qoo27734266: 這什麼等級的自傳 看攏謀
推 SpongeBoots: 用太多i了 10 一下的數字要拼出來
推 alice78226: 第一段was focused 改成focused
推 alice78226: 以LinkedIn的summary來講，字數略嫌多，建議再修精簡
→ alice78226: 些，下面的個人經歷再詳述技能與成就。