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你現在問題癥結是思考方式。
首先釐清，你寫的是論說文，所以你要說服讀者你說的是正確的真理，但是甚麼是真理呢
?其實世界上沒有真理，只有作者的自圓其說。然後社群專業同儕檢驗，你的論點在言論
市場中競爭，看能不能幸運出線。再繼續探討下去會講更深的哲學，但是目前這樣就夠了
，先就此打住。
英文寫作思考方式其實就是綱舉目張，正反合。大論點底下一定要有(相關的)小論點去支
撐。你談的所有梗一定都有正反兩面，然後激盪衝突以後會有新的真理(合，暫時性)出現
，之後無限循環下去，所以真理是屬於一種不斷革命論，然後隨時間典範會移轉(但是你
一個普通人走不到這一步)，你現在要玩的就是這樣的遊戲。看到這邊你可以想一想為何
你的寫作課程是叫做argument essay。這就是一種學術訓練的方式，藉由思考、思辨、自
己跟自己打架、自己跟外在世界打架，不斷在正反合的循環裡激盪，然後勇敢的用你的腦
跟手同心協力把它寫出來，成為一個真實的勞動成果。
你主題是關於性別，那就找出三個梗:A、B、C來講，但是每個梗在現今市場上一定會有正
反(或陰陽或黑白或上下或高低...)的論述，所以你要把你找到的證據在文章主體裡表達
成這樣:
A的
正VS反
小結A(合)
B的
正VS反
小結B(合)
C的
正VS反
小結C(合)
最後你在整個文章的大結論裡，看是要捧哪個多一點，貶哪個多一點，然後自行宏觀調控
之後說出自己總結的結論。
你這樣做的話，你的老師才看得出你的(正-反-合)思辯過程，至於是不是真的真理他不在
乎，他只在乎你是怎樣建構你自己的真理出來，若他認可了，就表示你有獨立思考的能力
(這很重要)，人類文明才有繼續解放演進的可能。
我發現你心底是在"贊成女生赤膊"跟"為什麼女生被認為不能赤膊"中打轉走不出來。
建議你內容就只專心探討前者就好，把支持你的論點找出來，
跟反對你的論點也找出來，然後把製造的稻草人往死裡打，
得出應該要讓女人打赤膊的結論。
※ 引述《D122 (小黑球)》之銘言：
: 如題 小弟最近在外國讀語言學校
: 雖然是語言的不同 文法 用詞習慣讓我寫英文文章一直受到挫折
: 但最近寫Argument Essay一直跟老師有疑惑的點對不上
: 以下是小弟目前草稿
: Gender Topless Equality
: Have you ever thought that it is strange that only men can be topless?
: In
: fact, the attitudes toward women’s bodies are still conservative. For
: example, social media, like Instagram, prohibits any pictures with women’s
: nipples, but Instagram requires “every” user to wear clothes. In 2015, Adda
: Smardottir, a student, held the activity “Free the nipple”. She argued with
: the unfair standard of social media. In short, currently, some people still
: cannot accept topless women, but actually, bare breasts are not as bad as
: most people think, and this argument can be made on three sides, gender
: equality, social media, and patriarchy.
: Gender topless equality is really a part of gender equality. In our
: daily
: life, women always wear bras and cover their breasts. Some people think that
: it is common, while some people think that it is illogical. Steinfeld (2017)
: claimed that women have totally different opinions to whether they can show
: their breasts. These differences depend on how they were born and grew up.
: Most of all, it is true that attitudes toward genders, especially when
: topless, are not equality. However, Steinfeld (2017) showed that in some
: cultures around the world, like aboriginal communities, women go topless to
: this day. Hence, topless women might not be bad as some people think, and not
: every person can not accept topless women. Actually, male and female breasts
: are similar in composition, and breasts are just parts of people, but society
: just rejects women’s breasts. It is unreasonable, and the right of topless
: really belongs to women. Only when women really have the right to decide
: whether they show their breasts, Gender equality will exist.
: In social media, pictures with topless women are not allowed to be
: posted.
: Wheeling (2015) showed that Facebook and Instagram have the double standard
: when judging pictures with bare humans, and many users’ accounts are closed
: due the rule of posting pictures. Moreover, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the
: reason why Facebook banned the topless pictures is that Facebook thought that
: some audiences may be sensitive to the pictures. It is necessary to consider
: users’ positions. However, Fischtein (2015) mentioned that people aged 60
: and over were least accepting of female topless behavior. It is because older
: people tend to be more conservative. It means that the most main users of
: social media, younger peoples, accept topless women more than older people.
: For another, Steinfeld (2017) claimed that the laws of public indecency are
: nebulous, so people can explain them in their own ways. In conclusion, the
: reason why Facebook banned users is not very reasonable, because just
: minority users can not accept pictures with topless women, but they really
: have a choice to reject them. In addition, to argue this controversial
: phenomenon, artists created the image of “an acceptable nipple”, a male
: nipple for people to paste it on their topless pictures.
: Hundreds years ago, people were in a patriarchy. Wheelng (2015) also
: claimed
: that women are more likely to be treated as sex objects. Patriarchy is a
: social system in which men have all the power. The society was controlled by
: men, and women were just properties of men. In addition, some people do not
: care that women are being dominated by men, and some women even promote this
: situations to others, including their daughters. Even in modern times, some
: people still treat women as sex objects. It causes the belief that women’s
: bodies are sexual and should be covered. However, this concept of females is
: really out of date, because in women’s view, men’s bodies are also sexual,
: but topless men can be accepted and not against the law of public indecency.
: To eliminate the bad tradition from patriarchy, the unfair attitudes toward
: women must be changed.
: In short, women really have right to show their breasts in public.
: There are
: many concepts of this topic in three sides, gender equality, social media,
: and patriarchy. Compared to attitudes toward topless men, attitudes toward
: topless women are too biased. Now, advanced countries are working for gender
: equality, but just the view of sex is still conservative. In social media,
: the double standard toward different genders is unreasonable. For another,
: patriarchy has limited a lot of women’s rights for a long time, and it is
: time to change this unreasonable situation. In conclusion, gender topless
: equality is necessary and represents an important process of women’s right.
: If women can show themselves without bias, the relationship between different
: genders would be better, and the society would be kinder and fairer to women.
: 因為要用到APA格式引用的關係 找兩方觀點相關的文章已經很頭大了
: 卻更被說"沒看到三個side的各兩方論點"
: 雖然列給老師看了 但跟他說還是一個頭兩個大
: 尤其在Social media那一段 老師是說沒兩方點 但我是要反駁"Facebook方的想法"
: 是因為我說得太委婉嗎(同學表示) 還是Organization上的問題呢(不習慣的點)
: 因為老師一直跳針的點是他不清楚哪個點 但跟他問了很久他卻也只是說不行
: 所以想請各位提供意見 感謝
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